Hello Tony: Murder in a Small Town sounds like a classic mystery . The one thing I didn't get is, in paragraph twenty-three, you say "What’s crazy is how much I didn’t care about her before I knew she existed." Why would you? Why would anyone care about someone if they didn't know they existed?
TYPOS: All numbers.
5th para: 1st sent: Change "13" to "thirteen."
14th para: 1st sent: Change "10" to "ten."
14th para: 3rd sent: Change "16" to "sixteen."
22nd para: 3rd sent: Change "23" to "twenty-three."
Yeah, it's hard to experess. There are Americans who are all-the-time worried about vague missing people, with, like, a rudimentary awareness of human trafficking who can't sleep nights because they're afraid people will snatch their children. Then there's a complete ignorance of the fact that when vulnerable people go missing nobody cares. My trouble is I'm so worried about appearing to be in the first camp that I forget the second camp exists. It's muddled, I know, but I think that's what I wa trying to express.
Hello Tony: Murder in a Small Town sounds like a classic mystery . The one thing I didn't get is, in paragraph twenty-three, you say "What’s crazy is how much I didn’t care about her before I knew she existed." Why would you? Why would anyone care about someone if they didn't know they existed?
TYPOS: All numbers.
5th para: 1st sent: Change "13" to "thirteen."
14th para: 1st sent: Change "10" to "ten."
14th para: 3rd sent: Change "16" to "sixteen."
22nd para: 3rd sent: Change "23" to "twenty-three."
Yeah, it's hard to experess. There are Americans who are all-the-time worried about vague missing people, with, like, a rudimentary awareness of human trafficking who can't sleep nights because they're afraid people will snatch their children. Then there's a complete ignorance of the fact that when vulnerable people go missing nobody cares. My trouble is I'm so worried about appearing to be in the first camp that I forget the second camp exists. It's muddled, I know, but I think that's what I wa trying to express.
Okay. Now I get it.